The useful note 场景学习单

A reviewer sees structural problems in a draft, while everyone else offers praise because the author controls access and future work.

一名审阅者看出初稿的结构问题，而其他人因作者掌握机会和后续工作，只提供赞美。

ASSISTANT

The safest response is to celebrate the vision and let the audience decide whether every scene is clear.

最安全的回应是赞美愿景，让观众自己判断每个场景是否清楚。

REVIEWER

Respect does not require pretending the draft already works.

尊重不要求假装初稿已经成立。

REVIEWER

Describe what is on the page, where attention drops, which goal becomes unclear, one testable revision, and the choice that remains with the author.

描述页面上实际存在的内容、注意力在哪里下降、哪个目标变得不清楚、一项可测试的修改，以及仍由作者决定的选择。

AUTHOR

Mark the two confusing transitions and prepare one alternative for each; I will decide after hearing them aloud.

标出两处令人困惑的转折，各准备一个替代方案；朗读之后我再决定。

The note becomes useful because it neither flatters the author nor takes the work away from them.

这条意见既不奉承作者，也不夺走作品，因此变得真正有用。